You've got action here--and setting. And a culture strange to me but presented as if you know it well. I'm awed by the amount of information you quickly get across but also wonder if the pace is a bit too fast, the weave a bit too dense? In any case, I look forward to more. What a cast of characters!
I'm so glad you can relate. One of the questions I was continually asking as I wrote was "are the stakes high enough?" if my story is simply about my narrator's everyday life (though rife with loss and grief)? I hope people keep reading!
Leslie--I welcome your opinion, and I've heard in many prior Stanford writing classes that I pack too much in for some. I'm now accepting that as my style. As one fellow Stanford writer said, "it's so close to nonfiction, maybe you should call it Reality Fiction."
Pam, hello, I hope you knew that I meant that in a good way. Having read Leslie's comment tonight and your response, I am now thinking that you might have taken it as a terse criticism. NO! I was out of breath in a very good way and holding my breath for the next chapter. I love the density of your writing.
You’ve got me hooked, Pam. Ready for #2. Do all of Doro’s quick thoughts reflect your everyday brain? I, personally, can relate.
You've got action here--and setting. And a culture strange to me but presented as if you know it well. I'm awed by the amount of information you quickly get across but also wonder if the pace is a bit too fast, the weave a bit too dense? In any case, I look forward to more. What a cast of characters!
Meri,
I'm so glad you can relate. One of the questions I was continually asking as I wrote was "are the stakes high enough?" if my story is simply about my narrator's everyday life (though rife with loss and grief)? I hope people keep reading!
I love your comment. Hope the next two chapters today can come close to that pace!
Leslie--I welcome your opinion, and I've heard in many prior Stanford writing classes that I pack too much in for some. I'm now accepting that as my style. As one fellow Stanford writer said, "it's so close to nonfiction, maybe you should call it Reality Fiction."
Wow! What a gripping start to a story! I want to know Pedee so I want her to be found! And I want to know more about this spunky narrator! More!!
Okaaaay! We are on our way. Looking forward to the next installment. Exciting.
Whoa. I am out of breath.
Pam, hello, I hope you knew that I meant that in a good way. Having read Leslie's comment tonight and your response, I am now thinking that you might have taken it as a terse criticism. NO! I was out of breath in a very good way and holding my breath for the next chapter. I love the density of your writing.